Stupid Kiddie Ride

[This post is a rewrite of yesterday’s post into a piece of fiction for yeah write. Regularly scheduled programming will resume tomorrow. I will explain myself then!]

 

I loved Disneyland but was WAY too old for stupid kiddie rides.

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My baby sister believed she would fly if she went on Peter Pan’s Flight. Literally.

“Peter Pan is not real, Neverland is not real, fairies are not real. It’s just a dumb ride,” I said. My sister was far too happy to be bothered by my mean remarks. She believed.

“It is only the gay and innocent and heartless who can fly.”*

It was crazy to wait so long just so my sister could “fly.” I was a big girl and knew the difference between real and make-believe.

All children, except one, grow up.”*

We waited for more than an hour, while the summer sun burned fiercely without respite. I couldn’t fathom why my parents would allow this unpleasantness. If I had kids, I would never permit it.

Never is an awfully long time.”*

I shuffled along, miserable, until reaching the inner sanctum and welcome shade it provided.

Eventually, we were next. The attendant helped my sister into the miniature galleon. I didn’t need help, obviously. My sister was giddy with excitement. I was embarrassed for her.

The galleon moved slowly forward into the Darling’s bedroom, which consisted of cartoon cutouts. The track on the ceiling indicated that we would “fly” out the bedroom window, into the “night.”

Wendy, Wendy, when you are sleeping in your silly bed you might be flying about with me saying funny things to the stars.”*

Then, through bad speakers, came the voice we had heard repeated 1000 times while waiting in line.

“Come on, everybody! Here we goooooooooooo!”**

The galleon jerked forward towards the window and “flew” out, just as I knew it would, ascending over “London.”

The room was dark with fake stars everywhere, little holes in black material backlit with lightbulbs. When I heard “Peter’s” voice delivering directions, I knew we were heading for “Neverland,” or whatever representation the Disney set technicians had recreated from the movie.

Second star to the right and straight on ’til morning. ”*

Unbelievably silly.

Then suddenly, as if by magic, the galleon disappeared and I was transported to Neverland.

Neverland is always more or less an island, with astonishing splashes of colour.”*

And I was flying beside my sister, who said “See?!!!”

Dazzling colors swirled around Neverland. We flew playfully, hand in hand, through the kaleidoscope sky.  Enraptured.

“Can anything harm us, mother, after the night-lights are lit?”*

Through the colors, quite suddenly, Captain Hook materialized. I darted rapidly, saving my sister from his menacing hook.  With long golden hair streaming behind us, we escaped.  Away into the glittering rainbow, along with the fairies.

“I do believe in fairies! I do! I do!”*

Maybe I’m not grown up quite yet.

“It is only the gay and innocent and heartless who can fly.”*

Turns out, it wasn’t stupid at all.

 

 

*J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan

**Peter Pan’s Flight, Disneyland

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24 Responses to “Stupid Kiddie Ride”

  1. MOVJuly 25, 2012 at 8:38 am #

    Nicely written! I love the part about how you were embrarrassed *for* her. I am almost 6 years older than my little sister, and I remember frequently being embarassed for her. Ha!

    best,
    MOV

  2. cathy@1970kikiprojectJuly 25, 2012 at 9:09 am #

    ooo, now i am interested to hear more tomorrow!!
    what an enjoyable read – well done, stacie!

  3. Erica MJuly 25, 2012 at 10:17 am #

    Sooooo proud of you for reworking and resubmitting. Doesn’t it feel good to not give up? Thanks for joining the summer writer’s series, Stacie.

  4. KathleenJuly 25, 2012 at 10:44 am #

    Great job! Loved you you worked the quotes into the story.

  5. Jester QueenJuly 25, 2012 at 10:57 am #

    I absolutely LOVE that ride. And the line clears out completely during the parade and right before closing. We rode it THREE TIMES. It’s the way the roller coaster switches from riding on a track below to being carried from above that totally does it for me.

  6. KianwiJuly 25, 2012 at 12:01 pm #

    I went and read yesterday’s post, as well, and I love both pieces! Two great stories, just with different purposes.

  7. IASoupMamaJuly 25, 2012 at 1:09 pm #

    I readily admit to being the only one in the family who wants to ride Peter Pan, but we do every time and every time I love it!

    I’m guessing I’d be the one who made my sister embarrassed for me.. oh well!

  8. Lindsey @ Happy or HungryJuly 25, 2012 at 2:22 pm #

    This sounds amazing! Flying is the one supernatural ability I always wished I had. I would die for this ride, I need to go there!

  9. christinaJuly 25, 2012 at 2:22 pm #

    i’m not familiar with the ride and i didn’t read yesterday’s piece, but i really enjoyed this. i really felt the innocense of childhood, of wanting to be a Big Girl vs. thinking the younger one is just so silly. i really enjoyed this.

  10. christie tateJuly 25, 2012 at 4:09 pm #

    Such a well done post. Makes me want to go to disney land,but I don’t want to stand in line. Great job.

  11. RosstwinmomJuly 25, 2012 at 4:13 pm #

    Okay, I JUST took my twins on this ride in June. Spot-on description!

  12. Melisa @ just begin from here.July 25, 2012 at 5:01 pm #

    Stacie, what a delightfully fun piece! So descriptive – I felt like I was there. And I loved reading your transformation from doubter to believer. Bravo!

  13. Louise DucoteJuly 25, 2012 at 6:07 pm #

    I love this! It’s one of my favorite books so I was thrilled to see the quotes interspersed with your prose. Nice rhythm, nice movement, nice progression of the narrator’s attitude. Well done!

  14. Kim @The G is SilentJuly 25, 2012 at 8:03 pm #

    I remember Disneyland as a teenager and how disappointed I was when my memories were shattered. It was so fake. So transparent! Then I brought my Noah when he was 3 and I saw it again – through his eyes. It was all so real again. It was beautiful and twinkly and scary and Never Never Land. Great story.

  15. Mary @ A Teachable MomJuly 25, 2012 at 8:32 pm #

    What a great story! I loved your descriptions, your change of heart and the way you worked in the quotes. Lovely!

  16. Sisterhood of the Sensible MomsJuly 25, 2012 at 10:15 pm #

    I love how you wove the quotes into the fabric of your tale. Nice. We are never too old. Ellen

  17. Jacqueline Bryant CampbellJuly 26, 2012 at 9:26 am #

    Very sweet story!

  18. Michelle LongoJuly 26, 2012 at 11:58 am #

    I don’t really know the story of Peter Pan, but I love the lines you’ve used. I loved your commentary with the lines. Excellent!

  19. Emma @Your Doctor's WifeJuly 26, 2012 at 12:28 pm #

    I love anything Disney! Your post just captures the magic of their parks!

  20. 50PeachJuly 26, 2012 at 2:23 pm #

    Loved the POV from the older sibling’s perspective. 🙂 Well done.

  21. MamarificJuly 26, 2012 at 6:42 pm #

    Love that ride and love how you captured it in this story!

  22. Fran@ Broken Cookies Don't CountJuly 27, 2012 at 5:59 am #

    I like this version too…not sure which I like better.

  23. MelanieJuly 27, 2012 at 4:42 pm #

    What do you mean you can’t write!? This is excellent. Short and sweet and poignant! Love!

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    […] That post, about the Peter Pan ride at Disneyland, never made it out of moderation. Instead, I got a love letter from the submissions editor, Flood. She was nice, constructive, and  pointed out that my piece was a journal entry, not a story. I’d read everything about what made a post grid-worthy but I still had missed the mark. At the time, we were encouraged to incorporate Flood’s suggestions and try again. So I edited, with embellishments, resubmitted my entry and ended up on the grid with my revised version (Stupid Kiddie Ride). […]

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