The magic was all in the finishing touches. Every detail, so important.
Pushing the room service cart into the corner for the time being, he made the bed – but not perfectly, sat on it to create a depression and a few wrinkles to suggest someone had messed it up at some point after housekeeping rounds. He straightened the lamp shade, leaving it slightly askew but not enough to draw attention, and then clicked the lamp on. He drew back the heavy velvet drapes, but left the blackout drapes closed. He placed the book – 50 Shades of Grey - on the end table, and smiled. He really didn’t believe in the whole inner goddess thing. He knew better.

Moving to the bathroom, he ran a bubble bath and then immediately drained the tub. An already damp bath towel hung over the rack, a nice touch that he had nothing to do with. He wet the toothbrush and placed it brush up inside a water glass, while leaving the rest of the toiletries in the bag.
Back in the main room, he cleared the room service dishes from the desk and loaded them on top of his cart. He drew aside the cloth covering the cart, and placed the empty wine bottle on the bottom level so that it was hidden. The nearly empty bottle from the room next door, he placed by the book, along with a glass which he filled partially with the remaining splash of wine. Finally, he wiped the crumbs from the desk and ran his white gloved finger over the still drying wood. Clean.
Satisfied, he pushed his cart out of the door and headed down the hallway to the elevator, his prize gagged and bound underneath, a safeguard for when the alcohol and roofies wore off.
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I’m playing over at the yeah write speakeasy again, the awesome place for poetry and fiction. We had to use the photo prompt and start with the sentence “The magic was all in the finishing touches.” Please come join the fun!


















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This was a fun post to read.
Thank you!
Love this detail:
An already wet bath towel hung over the rack, a nice touch that he had nothing to do with.
If I may suggest: Switching out DAMP for WET is expected, but it is more realistic. Wet makes me think mopping up a large spill…dripping water. Damp is more like used to dry off a body.
This is a scary story – and I will never drink from anything someone else hands me again. Gah.
Thanks Kristin!
You are so right – I changed it to damp
I don’t know why I find it easier to go creepy. My wine is totally untainted!
This hit the mark – so to speak. Nice details. Creepy. But I like dark stories. I gravitate toward writing dark myself. Dark characters are more interesting, I think. What motivates them and how do they cover their tracks. Nice job.
Good reasoning! Sounds better than saying I’m deeply disturbed…
I like the darker stories, they work for me and you did a great job with this one.
Thanks Jack, I appreciate it!
Brilliant story!
Aw, thanks!
Good grief, that was a twist and a half! Well done.
Thanks Sandra. I always wonder if I will pull it off – since I know what’s coming, I’m afraid it’s obvious.
very creepy! i was reading through, wondering what the phrase or detail was that must be included….my guess was “50 shades of grey!” nice work, stacie! do you compose more of the story in your head when you do these pieces, or just the paragraphs you share?? i am interested!
Thanks Cath. I don’t usually think beyond the short story. It makes me realize how hard it would be to write an entire novel!
This story was super creepy, and that last sentence surprised me! I wanted to keep reading….
Oooh thanks!
Creepy is the word. AND, the meaning of the title “Room Service” totally morphed throughout the piece. Great job.
Thanks so much Kristin!
How sinister! Truly chilling.
I even gave myself nightmares
Remind me never to stay there… And great job!!
Don’t stay there!
I love when you write creepy! I also adore that you added the Fifty Shades of Grey detail. Was the book hers, or is this one of those hotels that has been in the news lately that is replacing the in-room bible with a paperback copy of Fifty Shades?
Or did he leave it there?
Such an awesome job!!! It was creepy, interesting, easy to read…. perfect in my books.
Thanks Dawn, you made my day
Love it! My favourite kind of story to read has a creepy turn like this. I find my own fiction tends to veer in this direction too, no matter how pleasantly it starts out.
Nice to have a companion in creepiness! Come join the speakeasy!
So fun and creepy! What happens next?
I don’t know! I don’t think I’d be good at writing anything graphically disturbing. Maybe she gets away?
Love the story Stacie! Creepy!
Thanks Roz!
um, wow, girl. haha wow. i’m absolutely intrigued and want more of this.
Thanks Christina, that’s a nice compliment!
Creepy! And fantastically written – you kept me guessing about the nature of the evil he was up to right to the end. Love your use of the prompts!
Wow Stacie – delightfully creepy! Great job! I could hear the scary movie music while I read it.
Oh dear. Bad, bad man.
Loved the pacing. It just flowed and read true.
Wow…that sent shivers up my spine. You are an excellent writer Stacie!
Love reading this…a bit of entertainment for my stressful Sunday morning