Reckless

[Image: Page 1 of The Shining by Stephen King. Most of the text has been covered with black rectangles. The remainder reads:

speed seems comforting

bring a red carnation

perhaps

for the local undertaker

the circumstances ask a question

“I’m sorry?”]

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This is an erasure poem. Here is the original text:

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7 Responses to “Reckless”

  1. MelonyJanuary 10, 2018 at 2:59 am #

    Wow! Completely unrecognizable from the original text. I love how simple yet haunting your erasure is 😀

  2. NateJanuary 10, 2018 at 11:17 am #

    The poem brought together a full story for me. Someone speeding in a car, an accident, the deceased looking back on her/his moment of spontaneity and realizing it wasn’t worth it. I also like how you left the last line open for interpretation. For me, it is asked with the understanding that the apology isn’t enough.

  3. ashaJanuary 10, 2018 at 11:22 am #

    This could equally be titled A Parent’s Dread At Having Teenaged Drivers. It’s not as catchy, but wow this is my living fear (and I’m sure you understand that only too well).

  4. MM SchreierJanuary 10, 2018 at 2:58 pm #

    I loved how you teased out something so radically different from the original text. And to tell so much in so few words!

  5. LisaJanuary 10, 2018 at 6:04 pm #

    Ooh, so much in so few words. Not so easy to do, but you did it well.

  6. Michelle HJanuary 11, 2018 at 4:31 pm #

    Whoa, intense. It conveys so much emotion and story in such a short space.

  7. Donna-Louise BishopJanuary 11, 2018 at 5:08 pm #

    You used a great selection of words here to create a simple story with a big impact. I love how this form brings life to old words.

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