No One

by Stacie on March 12, 2013

A flash sparked across the sky,

but no one saw it.

A thunderous roar disrupted the quiet night,

but no one heard it.

The ground trembled,

but no one felt it.

The rain poured down,

but no one tasted it.

The wind carried a hint of sulfur,

but no one smelled it.

She had sensed the apocalypse,

but no one had believed her.

No one.

And that’s who survived.

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For the fiction/poetry speakeasy grid, we had to start with the sentence: “A flash sparked across the sky” and use the empty alley photo prompt.

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Suzanne March 12, 2013 at 8:39 pm

Oh, I love this Stacie! So dark and foreboding. And the structure and repetition you’ve used is excellent!

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 6:34 am

Aw thanks!

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IASoupMama March 12, 2013 at 11:20 pm

Gah! That was a powerful snippet of verse! Nicely done, darlin’!

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 6:34 am

Thanks Courtenay – I was blankin’ on the fiction this week…

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Sandra Crook March 13, 2013 at 3:50 am

Beautifully done, with great rhythm.

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 6:34 am

Thanks Sandra!

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Jack March 13, 2013 at 9:10 am

This reminded me of an Edgar Allen Poe poem.

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 5:42 pm

Really, which one?

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Bee March 13, 2013 at 10:15 am

I love how you evoke all of the senses in this piece. And what an ending!

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 5:43 pm

Thanks Bee!

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Kristin March 13, 2013 at 1:53 pm

Clever, my dear, very clever. I am going to go read it again, right now. Well done! Brava!

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 5:44 pm

Aw, thanks Kristin!

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deana March 13, 2013 at 4:17 pm

This is written beautifully!

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Stacie March 13, 2013 at 5:44 pm

Thank you Deana :)

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Natalie the Singingfool March 14, 2013 at 10:55 am

I love the way the last line ties it all together! Wonderfully done!

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:33 pm

Thanks Natalie!

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Mod Mom Beyond IndieDom March 14, 2013 at 11:34 am

Woah! Great take on the prompt. I love how you carried “no one” throughout. Didn’t see that coming at the end. Great job!

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:33 pm

Thank you!

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The Ecstatic Experience March 14, 2013 at 12:03 pm

I love this! It’s foreboding and beautiful at the same time. So powerful!

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:34 pm

At the risk of repeating myself, thanks!

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Dayle Lynne March 14, 2013 at 12:27 pm

Oooh, so dark and creepy and wonderfully written . . . I’m imagining the whole story from this. Well done!

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:34 pm

Thank you Dayle :)

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Samantha Brinn Merel March 14, 2013 at 12:29 pm

Wow, love this! It’s so dark and creepy and just perfect.

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:34 pm

Thanks Sam!

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Esther March 14, 2013 at 4:09 pm

Great ending!! It makes me wonder if she survived…

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:35 pm

That is a very good question! I hadn’t thought about that – I guess it could go either way.

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Biz March 14, 2013 at 4:40 pm

Love this one Stacie! You are just so fricken talented though!

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Stacie March 14, 2013 at 5:35 pm

Thanks Biz, you are so sweet!

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The Dose of Reality March 15, 2013 at 1:35 pm

GAH!!! What happens next???!!! I’ve got to know! –Lisa

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