First Crush

She carved their names in an oak tree knot,
But petals plucked said “he loves me not.”

The Eight Ball and Ouija both read no.
Yet despite the signs, she’d agree not.

Her teenage heart refused to believe.
Love-blind and stead-fast, she could see not.

Weeks passed, then months. The boy never looked.
She never approached, she would plead not.

A sage-friend reasoned to no avail.
From puppy love, wisdom could free not.

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This is a ghazal, or my attempt at one anyway. A WHAT? A type of love poem with a lot of rules about structure and rhymes and kennings and such. Write a ghazal for this month’s poetry slam at yeah write. I dare you.

This is yeah write’s NoMo writing challenge Day 3.

photo credit: Nature’s Heart via photopin (license)

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20 Responses to “First Crush”

  1. Michelle LongoNovember 3, 2015 at 5:48 pm #

    Yay! You wrote the thing!!

    • StacieNovember 3, 2015 at 8:33 pm #

      I did OMG! I might need a nap now.

  2. Jennifer KnoblockNovember 3, 2015 at 8:11 pm #

    I think you captured the feel of that teenage love so well…bonus points for the form! :)

    • StacieNovember 3, 2015 at 8:34 pm #

      I’m sort of blushing because I brute forced this and you are such an amazing poet. You do it all right. Your ghazal was amazing!

  3. EllenNovember 3, 2015 at 9:41 pm #

    I’m impressed!

    • StacieNovember 4, 2015 at 4:03 pm #

      Aw thanks. I love the poetry slams. You should try it!

  4. JanelleNovember 3, 2015 at 10:05 pm #

    Wow! I’ve never heard of a ghazal but I’m definitely going to have to try it! I’m no poet or anything but I did manage a post about the Canadian election in a series of haiku.

    • StacieNovember 4, 2015 at 4:04 pm #

      The poetry slams are fun; you should for sure try it. Rowan’s instructions are very clear. Plus, it gives you something to do for one of the 30 NoMo days!

  5. SHILPA GUPTENovember 4, 2015 at 9:54 am #

    Wow! That was beautifully captured, Stacie! You managed your ghazal so well!

    • StacieNovember 4, 2015 at 4:05 pm #

      Thanks Shilpa. It’s definitely not perfect but I had fun!

  6. theinnerzoneNovember 4, 2015 at 10:27 am #

    “Love-blind and stead-fast, she could see not.” Such a lovely line!
    Great job on the form. Like it very much.

    • StacieNovember 4, 2015 at 4:06 pm #

      Thank you. You should try it too!

  7. Andrea@WellnessNotesNovember 4, 2015 at 1:49 pm #

    I had never heard of a ghazal. It’s beautiful!

    • StacieNovember 4, 2015 at 4:07 pm #

      I hadn’t either. Yeah write does poetry slams every month where a form is chosen and then described. It’s really fun.

  8. Joe OrmerodNovember 4, 2015 at 5:27 pm #

    As the father of a once teenaged girl, I totally empathize with the single-mindedness!!!

  9. Ruby ManchandaNovember 5, 2015 at 8:26 am #

    Great job on the form.

  10. BeerayNovember 5, 2015 at 10:41 am #

    That was lovely. I read it out loud and loved how it sounded. Well done. I hope to see more

  11. NateNovember 5, 2015 at 1:43 pm #

    That picture is perfect; did you start there? I can see how complicated this is, getting the semantics right so “not” will work at the end of every second line. Very well done, Stacie. I could not tell you struggled.

  12. MichaelNovember 5, 2015 at 7:29 pm #

    Ah, l’amour. Nice job on the ghazal! I might try one the next go-round, if I can get all the rules right….

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